A place for us to share "what counts." INSTRUCTIONS: Click New Post in upper right hand corner. Type YOUR NAME in the Post field. Then, upload a painting (not a photograph) that reflects a theme of your writing. Include the title (italics) of the painting and the artist's name.To share the essay, go to your Google doc; click Share, and get the shareable link. Paste that in the large rectangle. Highlight and select "Link." DONE!
Thursday, April 21, 2016
Maegan Loveless
Title of picture- Fathers Day 2012
Author- Did not say
I really like the second sentence in the first paragraph because I think we all can agree how true it is. In the third paragraph I would change "there are mixed emotions" to "they have mixed emotions" just to tell how the family felt in a more clear way. In the last paragraph I would put a space in between the comma after the title of the story and the word "we".
I really like the second sentence in the third paragraph because when you think you have nothing, you always have family. In the third paragraph I would reword the first and third sentences, to show that most people that come from a bad household want to be successful to get the things they never had growing up. In the fourth paragraph, I would change "these things" to "such qualities" to make the paragraph more detailed.
I really like the second sentence in the first paragraph because I think we all can agree how true it is. In the third paragraph I would change "there are mixed emotions" to "they have mixed emotions" just to tell how the family felt in a more clear way. In the last paragraph I would put a space in between the comma after the title of the story and the word "we".
ReplyDeleteI really like the second sentence in the third paragraph because when you think you have nothing, you always have family. In the third paragraph I would reword the first and third sentences, to show that most people that come from a bad household want to be successful to get the things they never had growing up. In the fourth paragraph, I would change "these things" to "such qualities" to make the paragraph more detailed.
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