A place for us to share "what counts." INSTRUCTIONS: Click New Post in upper right hand corner. Type YOUR NAME in the Post field. Then, upload a painting (not a photograph) that reflects a theme of your writing. Include the title (italics) of the painting and the artist's name.To share the essay, go to your Google doc; click Share, and get the shareable link. Paste that in the large rectangle. Highlight and select "Link." DONE!
Friday, April 15, 2016
Courtney Galloup
Shadow Of His Wings by Unknown
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1TXxB4dsA6iQd6VsMOETdJwj3oSN0hEI0pRCR7DGlldc/edit
You had a impressive essay overall and I liked the conclusion it had supportive details about the essay. I liked how you started the body paragraphs with a good topic sentence. I thought you could try to add just a little more in the second paragraph to have more detail.
You had a impressive essay overall and I liked the conclusion it had supportive details about the essay. I liked how you started the body paragraphs with a good topic sentence. I thought you could try to add just a little more in the second paragraph to have more detail.
ReplyDeleteThe essay was very interesting. Great detail in most places. You could also add more information in the second paragraph to give it the extra bang!
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